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Pompous elevator pitches turn off reporters and others

When somebody asks “What do you do?” how do you respond?

If your answer includes words with multiple syllables or jargon, words that only people in your industry can understand, you’ve probably forced their brain into shut-down mode.

The Philadelphia Inquirer article “Too many firms use jargon to convey ideas” offers example after example of pompous, bloated, puffed up elevator pitches. Many of them appear in press release boilerplate, at company websites and in marketing materials.

The article reminds me, by the way, of how much I despise the buzzword “thought leader” which seems to be universally accepted, even by the reporter who wrote the Inquirer article. PR people use it repeatedly in executive bios and pitches to the media and bloggers. Wikipedia says the term was first coined in 1994 by Joel Kurtzman, editor-in-chief of the magazine, Strategy & Business.

“The term was used to designate interview subjects for that magazine who had contributed new thoughts to business.”

My article How to write a bio for your press kit explains that most bios I read are more potent than sleeping pills. It offers tips on how to spruce up yours.

I’m curious. Do you use the phrase “thought leader” in your PR materials? If so, why or why not?

by Joan Stewart on August 12, 2008

Filed Under: Public Relations Tagged With: Media Relations, Pitching

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  1. Lisa Braithwaite says

    August 12, 2008 at 4:55 pm

    Joan, I would never use the term “thought leader” or pretty much another other business-y jargon. Of course, it’s part of my job as a public speaking coach to wean my clients off of that kind of language!

    Another thing that irks me about elevator pitches is when people try to be clever and make you guess what they do instead of just being straightforward (like “I make dreams come true” instead of “I’m a wedding planner”). That’s the new trend, apparently, to make yourself stand out. Why be manipulative and tricky when you’re just supposed to be introducing yourself? I don’t get it.

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  2. Peggie Arvidson says

    August 13, 2008 at 8:01 am

    I agree with your thoughts and Lisa’s — yikes, I’m tired of the guessing games. I think it got all convuluted as people tried to think “benefits first” and “get the prospect to ask you questions.”

    Me? I’m lucky. I get plenty of questions when I answer “I read hands.” It is what I do, and there are many benefits and many misconceptions about it. It helps that, according to everyone I meet and share this info with, “I look so normal.” So they feel comfortable asking questions.

    Thanks for making me think!

    Peggie

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